ESL 091      Homework 11     NY/NJ 3^rd Draft

John McDermott

HW 11-19-04     Due 12-3-04

1. Continue researching and preparing for the Environment Essay. First Draft is due 12-10-04—our last class!

2. Re-write your essay about preferring New York or New Jersey.  

FOCUS: 

·        Improve your Introduction.

·        Polish your Body (middle) paragraphs.

·        Improve your Conclusion

·        Check your grammar and comparisons.  You are responsible, even if I did not identify a problem like spelling or verb.

·        Turn in you notes, planning, and all three (3) drafts of the essay, newest stapled on top. If  you give me only two (2) drafts, you get zero on the third—the one that counts most!

·        Type. No exceptions.

·        Use “Format for Professional Looking Papers” or lose significant points.

Introduction:

REMEMBER: DO NOT START THE INTRO WITH THE MAIN IDEA (thesis) OF THE ESSAY!!!  Start with background BEFORE the thesis!!

·        Intros have different organization than other paragraphs!

·        Yes, they should start with a sentence that lets your reader know the general subject, BUT

·        The Controlling Idea of the essay should be the LAST sentence of the paragraph.   The Controlling Idea of an essay is usually called the THESIS.

Body:

·        Review the handout on NY/NJ and make sure you have good comparisons in your Topic Sentences

·        Discuss both places in every comparison.

·        Make sure your paragraph matches your Topic Sentence—and only what is previewed in the Topic Sentence.

Conclusion:

·        For this conclusion, I want you to REVIEW the key points of the body paragraphs and the Controlling Idea (Thesis) that ends your Intro. 

·        (Review Conclusions are the most common type in College essays.)

If you have problems, contact me early so I can help and you can turn this in on time.  I teach 11:00 to 1:30 M/W/F and 7:40  T/Th.  I can meet you before or after these classes.   You have the number and email on many papers I have given you.